IELTS Writing Task 1: bar chart essay
Here's a full band 9 essay:
The bar chart compares consumer spending on six different items in Germany, Italy, France and Britain.
It is clear that British people spent significantly more money than people in the other three countries on all six goods. Of the six items, consumers spent the most money on photographic film.
People in Britain spent just over £170,000 on photographic film, which is the highest figure shown on the chart. By contrast, Germans were the lowest overall spenders, with roughly the same figures (just under £150,000) for each of the six products.
The figures for spending on toys were the same in both France and Italy, at nearly £160,000. However, while French people spent more than Italians on photographic film and CDs, Italians paid out more for personal stereos, tennis racquets and perfumes. The amount spent by French people on tennis racquets, around £145,000, is the lowest figure shown on the chart.
Note:
- I tried to keep the essay short (154 words) by selecting carefully.
- It's difficult to change spend, but I used spending, spenders and paid out.
- I tried to keep the essay short (154 words) by selecting carefully.
- It's difficult to change spend, but I used spending, spenders and paid out.
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Hi. I'm looking for a real band 9 writing task 1 of IELTS. I don't wanna offend you. But, how can i know this is the one? After reading the essay, i have found that some words are repeatedly used along with "spend" such as "people", "items", "figure". Besides, you still have some minor mistakes of vocabulary and grammar.
This bar chart essay is more comprehensive rather than putting this is in a standard chart. Money spent on toys is a bit outrageous and unnecessary but is inspiring for toy manufacturers. Layce of Research paper help
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